I'm posting this early as I'll be out of town next week.
Title: Leaky alibis
By
Author: John M. Floyd
Tag line: Sheriff
Jones and Angela Potts were on the trail of the killer who’d wronged Mr. Wright…
Police characters: Sheriff Jones.
The gist: Yesterday someone had shot Alderman Wyatt in
his office at City Hall. He had had no appointments
for the time around his death and no evidence was left at the scene according
to the Crime Scene techs. No strangers
were seen in the area and no one heard anything unusual except one gunshot at
around 2:00 in the afternoon.
Sheriff
Jones suspected one of three people.
Bernard was the HR manager who had an office on the third floor across
the street in the courthouse. Bernard’s
wife, Deb, was having an affair with Alderman Wyatt. The second suspect was Attorney Miller who was
hot-headed and was the father of Alderman Wyatt’s wife. The third suspect was the wronged wife
herself, Melissa. Melissa was a circuit
clerk who had an office on the ground floor of the courthouse.
Alderman
Wyatt and Deb thought their affair was a secret, but most everyone in this
small town knew about it. Two of the
suspects did not have good alibis.
Attorney Miller had left a Rotary Club meeting at 1:50. The meeting location was only one block away,
giving him enough time to get to Alderman Wyatt’s office by two. Wife Melissa had no witnesses to confirm her
claim that she had been alone working in her office at the time of the murder. Melissa claims that she had eaten lunch and
then went straight to the HR manager’s office for a meeting.
The third suspect,
Bernard the HR manager, had an assistant that backed up his alibi saying he was
in his office all day, and in fact skipped lunch. The assistant told police that she remembered
Melissa arriving there at around 2:10 o’clock because she had an appointment
about an HR matter. The assistant said she was sure of the time because Melissa
had put down her very wet umbrella right next to some papers and they all got
wet. Those documents were being picked
up very shortly, so the assistant had her eye on the clock while she reprinted
them. Melissa’s meeting lasted for about
twenty minutes.
Sheriff
Jones noted that it had rained very hard yesterday between noon and four. When Ms. Potts asked about security cameras, Jones
said there was none in the municipal government building, and that there was no
budget for cameras there, unlike the federal buildings.
Mrs. Potts
knew who had killed the alderman.
Crime scene: Alderman Wyatt’s office.
Clues: The rain.
Suspects: The HR
manager, the wife’s father Attorney Miller, or the wife Melissa.
Red herrings: None.
Solution: The
wife, Melissa, was the killer. Her
office was in the same building as the HR manger. She claimed she left her office and went
directly to the HR meeting. She had no
need to go outside in the rain, yet her umbrella was wet. Her husband’s office was across the street.
My two cents: The tag line was cute,
as was the title.
This story
worked on all levels. The police work
was good. John covered the security
camera angle. There was motive. It was
well written and the pacing was crisp.
Mrs. Potts and Sheriff Jones worked well together. In this story he had stopped by her house for
a piece of pie and they were talking about yesterday’s murder. Although not
police protocol, in this small town these two characters do that often, and she
usually sees things that he misses. The
clue was handled very well and slipped in in pieces. First you were told where
her office was when the suspects were being discussed. Later you learned that she had an appointment
with the HR manager and was there around the time of the murder. Then you heard about her ruining some papers
with her wet umbrella.
Nice job,
Mr. Floyd. Probably the best clue I’ve read in a long time.
Five stars.
6 comments:
I actually wasn't keen on this one - the wet umbrella screamed at me as soon as it was mentioned! Just goes to show you can't please all of the people...
@ Bernadette. When I first read the story and saw the umbrella thing, I went back and reread the time of the rain and thought that part was just locking in the time. I didn't pay attention to the opening remarks about where her office was. Fooled me. I liked that the clue was spread out a bit and not in your face. Well, at least not in my face... :). You were sharper on this one than I was.
And you know I'm not a big fan of Mrs. Potts, but I couldn't find anything wrong with this story. It was actually a good story in that she wasn't mean to him, he had done his police work and was mulling over the details, and of course she picked up on something he missed... but that's the MO with these Potts/Jones stories. The story wasn't too gooberish and had a more modern feel to it. I hope this trend continues. I like John and I don't like smashing his stories.
The wet brolly clue leapt off the page at me, too, and was then hammered home with the secretary needing to reprint the wet paperwork. Honestly, I didn't think this was one of John's finest. Usually I'm a fan but so much info was crammed into the paragraph where Sheriff Jones was telling Angela about the three suspects that I had to read it several times to get it clear in my head. Not my favourite of his, I'm afraid.
Yeah, Jody, I think you must have read this too fast. The wife might as well have been wearing a sign that said, "I did it, Mrs. Potts, choose me!"
However, John Floyd knows what WW will buy and he can laugh all the way to the bank.
@ Chris and Mary Jo,
Yes, John slipped it right by me that the wife's office was across the street. I didn't catch it. I thought it was perfectly normal to have a wet umbrella in a pouring rain. I thought the wet papers were just a way to set the time for her alibi. I was leaning towards the hostile father. He had the time and the motive but I couldn't find the incriminating clue for him. Haha... I didn't find the incriminating clue for the real killer either.
I couldn't figure this one out either, even though I knew it had to do with the wet umbrella...
Bettye Griffin
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