Title:
Recipe for crime
By Author: S. Furlong-Bolliger
Tag
line: Would the sheriff be able to sift through
the facts and solve the crime?
Police
characters: Sheriff
June Clark, Deputy Beau Hicks
The
gist: The Corner Café Bakery had been trashed with
most of the damage in the kitchen. Nothing appeared to be stolen, and in fact
the cash box was still full and under the counter. The refrigerator was open and the contents
strewn. The drawers were overturned. All the shelves, which were floor to ceiling,
were emptied. Sheriff Clark noticed a
flour bag had been emptied onto the floor but no footprints were in the mess. The
owner came up with the names of three people who might want to harm her
business. The first suspect, a short plump woman who was the bakery owner down
the street, said the Corner Café had a lousy baker and it didn’t affect her
business one bit. She had flour on her apron. The second suspect, a fired
employee, a tall lanky male, said he was mad that he got fired but he didn’t
trash the place. The third suspect was
the estranged husband, a short balding man, who said his wife was a lousy baker
and even worse cook and that she was wasting their money on the bakery.
Sheriff Clark knew who did it.
Crime
scene: Bakery.
Clues: The flour all over the floor, the tall shelves
emptied, the height of each of the suspects.
Suspects:
Competitor bakery owner, fired employee,
estranged husband.
Red
herrings: Flour on competitor’s apron.
Solution: Only
the fired employee was tall enough to reach the high shelves.
My
two cents: I think the clue was planted well in this
story. It was hidden in the info of each
suspect, something the reader barely pays attention to.
Of course this works only if it really was the fired
employee. Just because a finger was
pointed at him, doesn’t mean he did it because he’s tall. Could have been random vandals out on a
destruction spree and craving a cupcake.
All in all a decent story, paced well, with a
not-so-obvious clue. Even the tag line
was clever. My only complaint is that
the word lousy was used twice. Find a
thesaurus.
Four stars. Who can tell me what crime was committed here?
PS Speaking of
thesauruses here’s a joke:
A truck carrying a load of thesauruses careened off a
bridge. The bystanders were dazed,
astonished, dismayed, shocked, startled, speechless and dumbfounded.
Hee hee.
7 comments:
I love your joke, Jody. And, I thought this was a clever story with a good, well-placed clue. Guess the crime was vandalism or criminal damage to property?
As a littley, I can still reach stuff on shelves. I use something called a ladder (or a chair, or I stand on an upturned box). I have even been know to use a broom handle to hoik stuff down before now. There's no end to the ingenuity of the small people. Ve haf vays of getting things down.
Nicely done story though and I loved the joke, Jody.
@ Tamara. Yes, vandalism, property damage over $250, and breaking and entering.
@ Chris. Good point. It wasn't the best clue as to whodunit, but it was well hidden in the body of the story. I sent in a kitchen murder where when the perp showed up for questioning, although he had gone home and changed clothes and shoes, he had a little smudge of flour in his hair...it got rejected.
Did you show us that one, Jody? It is sounding familiar.
@Tamara -- Yes, I posted that one. I guess I should have made him taller. :)
ha ha. I left you a message on the romance site under my "Shakespeare & Love" post. Since Kate moved on to a new story, I figure you won't go back and look at it.
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