Title:
Station break
By
Author: Leslie Padgett
Appearing in issue #40, October 7,
2013
Tag line: The detective had to get a new perspective on
the crime scene before he could figure out who was guilty…
Police characters: Detective Jason Holt
The gist: Someone murdered DJ Todd in his booth
at the radio station. He was found
slumped over his console still wearing his headphones. A sheet of paper with the writing 337 H was
found near the body. He was found by Hannah,
the station’s secretary, who came in to work first at 6:00 a.m. and saw his car
in the parking lot. She figured he had
stayed overnight to work on some promo material. She brought him coffee and found him dead. She had a love interest in DJ Todd, but it
wasn’t returned. Hannah had knocked over
a stack of papers in her haste to back out of the booth. She picked them up and put them back on the
desk, then called the police. She told
the detective that DJ Todd’s death was going to be a disaster for the station. The station manager, Hank Lee, arrived 20 minutes
after Hannah. The detective found Hank in
his office. Hank was on the phone ordering
up an older show to fill the air time. Hank told the detective that Todd had wanted a
raise and when he was told no Todd threatened to take his show to a bigger
station. Another DJ, a competitor who
resented Todd because he took over his prime time spot, told the detective that
Todd was an insensitive jerk. No one knew what 337 H meant. Hannah suggested it was a page in Todd’s
journal, a journal that Todd kept under lock and key because it contained
inside info on everyone Todd has ever met.
Everyone
left the crime scene, but before they did Detective Holt took one last look and
figured out who the killer was.
Crime scene: DJ booth at a radio station.
Clues: 337 H
Suspects: Besides everyone in the world in his journal? Hank or the second DJ.
Red herrings: The journal with dirt on everybody he had ever met in his
entire life. And Hannah, who had a
crush on him that wasn’t returned.
Solution: After the DJ was shot he tried to ID his killer by writing down
his name. H Lee looks like 337 H upside
down. Hannah had dropped the papers and in
her haste had gathered them up and put them on the desk backwards.
My two cents:
Geez, didn’t anybody like this
guy? There are a lot of moving parts to
this story. You almost need a map. Not only were there three people at the station
who had a motive (Well, Hannah’s wasn’t really a motive. I mean you don’t kill someone who doesn’t
love you back. ) the author made sure there was a journal that had dirt on
everyone the DJ had ever met. Seems a
bit over the top. I’m not sure why
Hannah surmised that the DJ had spent the night at the station because his car
was in the lot before hers. Maybe he
came in early that day? That seems more
likely. Her comment that the DJ’s death
was going to be a disaster for the station seemed odd for someone who was in
love with him. She seemed to care more
about the station. If the DJ threatened
to leave and take his show, which apparently was an important show for the
station and it would be a disaster if he left, how would killing him solve that
problem?
I don’t
recommend having the characters names as close as they are; Holt, Hannah,
Hank. It’s too confusing.
Also if I was dying and I had a moment to
scratch out the killer’s name, I would probably write Hank…not H Lee. Just a thought. This story was just so-so.
3 comments:
Haven't I read that clue in other mysteries? I don't remember where, but it seemed very familiar.Yes, this seemed like a very busy story for only 700 words.
Jody, I think killing him would have prevented another station from getting his popular show, which would be competition. I though this story was okay, except for the assumption that the victim had spent the night. I would have assumed he'd gotten there early.
I enjoyed the story but felt that the ending was contrived. Who's going to write H Lee when they could just write Hank? It jarred for me. And I seem to remember a High School story with a similar ending a few months ago. Different setting but pretty much the same solution, I think. Have to agree about the use of the same initial, too. Unless it's done deliberately to cause confusion, different letters for each character's name make things much clearer.
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