By Author John M. Floyd
My two cents: The story works. This time Sheriff Jones had one or two good lines. “It’s a new store. They buy, sell and trade anything gold. Watches, rings, teeth, you name it.” While watching the video he said, “Criminals one, businessmen zero.”
My only comment is that during an investigation cops will ask for a description of the robber, not what the employees are wearing. Although Mrs. Potts asked that question, I doubt Sheriff Jones would have made those kinds of notes. I would have changed that part so that we got a full head-to-toe glimpse of Wade on the video. That way we could see what shoes he had on. I also thought the ‘young man had tattoos’ was a bit of racial profiling. Racial profiling is a process by which individuals are targeted for special attention, often by such things as height, weight, build, clothing, hair color, tattoos, hats, the car they are driving, etc. Of course, cops do that in the real world but I thought it was a bit un-PC for WW.