tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post9124630184874642720..comments2023-09-30T10:31:07.390-04:00Comments on Short Fiction. Write it. Sell it. : Issue #29, July 22, 2013 Jody E. Lebelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-69126314190086874372013-07-13T08:38:10.743-04:002013-07-13T08:38:10.743-04:00I was surprised at all the negativity in this stor...I was surprised at all the negativity in this story. It didn't leave the reader feeling good. WW is an upbeat and very frilly magazine with pretty pictures of flowers and kittens. So it seems anything goes when you're writing about crime. I guess we have to assume this crook broke into the vault as there is no money in the teller drawers on Sunday. Not a job really for just one man. Another loop hole in this sad tale.Jody E. Lebelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-80340260718646705852013-07-13T03:26:39.506-04:002013-07-13T03:26:39.506-04:00Jody, at last I am hearing that you are as impatie...Jody, at last I am hearing that you are as impatient with these characters as I have always been. Does anyone feel better after reading one of these little tales? I am sure Mr. Floyd is laughing all the way to the bank.Mary Jonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-63827281329485259982013-07-12T19:59:31.679-04:002013-07-12T19:59:31.679-04:00Yes, I will have to give him that. He did muddy t...Yes, I will have to give him that. He did muddy the waters. Almost a red herring in the sense that the reader is led to believe the overcoat is the solution clue. This author often uses several columns building up the characters and their relationship, which is what is selling these stories. The crimes are a bit lame. I wouldn't even mind that if I liked the two main characters. I wished they played off each other in a more engaging way. I guess I just don't like curmudgeons and find crabby people annoying. I certainly don't want to read about them. Jody E. Lebelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-21876469747526308152013-07-12T16:50:41.811-04:002013-07-12T16:50:41.811-04:00The sheriff in this story definitely needs a humou...The sheriff in this story definitely needs a humour transplant, but then fictional cops are often portrayed that way - either grumpy as hell or dimmer than a flash-light in fog. I see him as a bit of a Walter Matthau type and I'm sure one day he's going to surprise us all by beating Mrs Potts to the solution. <br /><br />I got the 'clue' that anyone walking out of the back door of a bank in a long overcoat on a hot day was probably up to no good and I did wonder why alarms weren't ringing, not only with the policeman but in the bank too. An explanation would have been nice. A lot of the 700 words were used up in scene setting on this one, which I felt was a little bit wasteful. Still, I completely missed the real clue about the bingo win having been on the Friday two days ago, making this a Sunday, so all that careful muddying of the waters worked. Job done. Chrisnoreply@blogger.com