tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post9053411884290142641..comments2023-09-30T10:31:07.390-04:00Comments on Short Fiction. Write it. Sell it. : Appearing in issue #3, January 19, 2015Jody E. Lebelhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-29787786248796649332015-01-17T12:06:32.738-05:002015-01-17T12:06:32.738-05:00My mom lives in a ten story building for seniors. ...My mom lives in a ten story building for seniors. One of the residents has a yappy dog. There have been times that I have been waiting on the elevator in the lobby and could hear that dog barking in the elevator from the fifth floor all the way down. It is an older building and you can hear the bell ding when the elevator stops on each floor while you wait for it. Every noise sort of echoes down the elevator shaft. I sort of wondered why he didn't hear her scream since it appears each floor has one apartment and couln't be very large.<br />The story was very good and I liked the writer's style.Susannoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-64196617770001657362015-01-17T09:45:12.201-05:002015-01-17T09:45:12.201-05:00@ Chris
My take on his hearing story was that h...@ Chris <br /><br />My take on his hearing story was that he said he could hear everything to set up the writer on the third floor, but the detectives realized he lied, he couldn't hear anything.Jody E. Lebelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-56307170852416094532015-01-17T03:00:38.315-05:002015-01-17T03:00:38.315-05:00I bought into him being able to hear the elevator ...I bought into him being able to hear the elevator stop halfway down as it is a mechanical device that goes right through the building. I imagine you'd become familiar with the sound of it going up and down. There'd be clicks or clangs and the whir of machinery, especially if it's an old one. But he's in the basement and the body is found several floors up, so someone screaming might not carry all the way down to the cellar. So I struggled with the conclusion that him not hearing her when he said he had good hearing must mean he was lying. Otherwise, a well written story.Chrisnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-68407478210933518982015-01-16T21:14:02.702-05:002015-01-16T21:14:02.702-05:00@ Bettye. I have to say I missed the screaming pa...@ Bettye. I have to say I missed the screaming part. I was concentrating on the 'could he really hear if the elevator stopped on the third floor' part. <br /><br />And you'd think I'd be sharper by now... :)Jody E. Lebelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-66793447031416488832015-01-16T20:58:20.253-05:002015-01-16T20:58:20.253-05:00I haven't read this story (and it's probab...I haven't read this story (and it's probably too late now), but I figured out the solution from reading this synopsis.bettye griffinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04457387770524295498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-80411790800845124962015-01-16T18:41:50.879-05:002015-01-16T18:41:50.879-05:00@ Tamara. It IS a lot of words in my view also. ...@ Tamara. It IS a lot of words in my view also. That's why I thought a little hint of trouble between Joe and the manager about Joe's work would allow a shorter explanation. <br /><br />I went and counted too, after you mentioned it. Yep, it's 727 words. Johnene must like the wiggle room when she demands 700 words. Jody E. Lebelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08777207515123248962noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5015329098122035196.post-71753746060503334422015-01-16T17:07:11.222-05:002015-01-16T17:07:11.222-05:00This is the story I did a word count on and commen...This is the story I did a word count on and commented about earlier. The solution was 89 words, which seemed like a lot at the time. Perhaps I think better of that now.Tamaranoreply@blogger.com